| Chapter 4 - Section 4a2: Be Concise
Directness and clarity are valued over wordiness on the GMAT. Do not use several words when one will work just as well. Many writers tend to add excessive phrases like "take into consideration" in order to sound scholarly. This only makes the text sound inflated and perhaps pretentious.
WORDY: I am of the opinion that the said managers should be admonished for their utilization of customer response services.
CONCISE: We should tell the managers to improve customer service.
Shorten the sentences below to make them as concise as possible. (see answers)
1. This internet company is not
prepared to expand at this point in time.
3. The airline has a problem with always having arrivals that come at least an hour late, despite the fact that the leaders of the airline promise that promptness is a goal that has a high priority for all the employees involved.
1. The internet company is not prepared to expand now.
2. Since Roger has worked for this site so carefully, we should award him the contract.
3. Flights are always at least an hour late on this airline, though its leaders promise that promptness is a high priority for all its employees.
4. Although she is inexperienced in photography, she will probably succeed because she is motivated.
5. The United States cannot spend more money to alleviate other countries' suffering when its own citizens suffer.
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